Rock-a-bye baby, on the treetop...
"Milk, biscuits, a few vegetables...", I repeated the list to myself to ensure I wouldn't forget it. It was quite difficult, considering the fact that it was quite foggy and the road wasn't clearly visible. Luckily, for me, I had driven these roads for seven years now, so I knew them like the back of my hand.
Fog wouldn't engulf our small town till at least, late November, usually. It was a little surprising to see it this early in October, but it didn't affect me, for I knew the way.
My head started to blank out. I was just too exhausted. I fought the sleep in my eyes and pressed on, driving patiently to the destination.
A few long minutes later, I reached the local supermarket. I greeted David at the store, but he looked distraught. He was huddled in a corner, looking intensely at the floor. David and I usually didn't talk much, especially about family. But he looked a lot disturbed today.
"Everything alright, mate?"
He slowly looked back up to me, and replied, "Yeah....it's just that, well....I had a bad day."
"What's wrong?"
"I...saw something...its a sign.. A sign that something bad is coming."
I didn't know how to react. You see, I'm not a firm believer in superstitions. I didn't know how to console him. Maybe if I kept talking to him, he'd feel better.
"A sign? What sign?"
"In my culture, we believe that seeing a dead rat is a bad omen. I don't want anything to happen to my family, Sean. Especially since my young boy is back home."
"Ah, you mean little Sam Harper? How old is he now?"
"He'll turn 3 next month. What a little bag of excitement!"
David seemed to brighten up a little, so I continued my talking therapy, while walking over to the vegetable aisle.
"Hey Sean, don't you have a kid too?"
"You heard right, I have a little boy too. His name's Greg."
"That's lovely!!" David exclaimed. "How old is the boy?"
"He'll turn 2 in two months. He said his first word last week you know? It was adorable."
I then stopped, before we ventured into the sad side of my life. However, David was on a roll now.
"What was it? Was it your name or his mother's?"
"T'was his mother's." I really wanted to leave the place now. I didn't want to go through the sadness all over again.
"What's his mother's name eh? Pardon me, but I've forgotten..."
"David, I really don't want to talk right now....-"
"Oh I see, why's that?"
I decided to just tell him, or he'd never shut up.
"Mary, Greg's mother, passed away last month.. You know what, I should leave."
He started to say something, but I left some money on the counter and practically ran out of there. I couldn't bear to think of that again. I turned on the radio and expelled all my thoughts.
Approximately fifteen minutes later, I reached home. The babysitter must've left a few minutes ago, for I didn't see anyone from out here,
I opened the door to see my little boy, and there he was, almost asleep on the sofa. I took him in my arms and tucked him in the cradle, then, after keeping the groceries in the hall, walked to my bed.
On the way to my bed, I heard a sweet, familiar voice sing from Greg's room,
"Rock-a-bye baby, on the treetop
When the wind blows, the cradle will rock..."
I walked back to his room, and saw the cradle rocking gently, with Greg fast asleep. Mary sat beside him on the rocking chair, and smiled at me when I looked at her. I walked back to my room, and smiled to myself, admiring my wife's beautiful voice. Before I drifted off, I heard Mary complete the lullaby,
When the bough breaks, the cradle will fall
And down will come the baby, cradle and all...
Woahh! The description of details and the narration was amazing to read as always and the ending caught me off guard! Keep writing :)
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DeleteVery nice one Armaan!! I loved the way you have added the nursery rhyme in the context of the story!! Innovative idea!! Keep writing!!!
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DeleteWay to go Armaan. Keep it up. Buddy writer in the making!
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DeleteThe story is really captivating... Very well written and articulated... the use of the lullaby in the right context gives you the chills!! Great job Armaan!!! Can't wait to read more stories 🙂
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DeleteA thriller writer in the making. I won't your blogs Armaan. Super job.
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Superb narrative Armaan and extraordinary imagination . And that nursery rhyme induction - a masterstroke. Great. Keep at it.
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DeleteA very intriguing read, right from the start Armaan. Could easily visualize the story. Keep up the great work!
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DeleteLoved this story.. the ending gave me chills!
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DeleteAbsolutely thrilling Armaan!The narration is too good.The suspence is awesome.
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Waiting for more such thrillers from you!
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DeleteVery good descriptions and dialogue, and a scary ending! I'll show it to my kids!
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DeleteI hope they like it too ! :D
reading your stuff after quite some time. and as usual,....Amazed. great narration, as usual. eerie and surreal, as usual
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